haiku (?)

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    July 29, 2010 8:11 PM BST
    my summer closet,
    shimmery dresses hang there,
    but nowhere to go.

    Anybody else? - got to be better than mine...

    Best,
    Melody
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    July 29, 2010 8:36 PM BST
    Fresh buds in springtime,
    Resplendent blooms in summer -
    Destined transition.

    Hugs,

    Judith
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    July 30, 2010 7:45 PM BST
    Hi Judith,

    I really like your haiku. It works on at least two levels: as a nature poem when taken literally, and as a metaphor appropriate to it's TGS audience.

    Anyone else?

    Best,
    Melody
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    August 1, 2010 9:47 PM BST
    Definitely not haiku:

    There was a young CD named Cass
    A footwear collection she amassed
    Till trying on a new shoe
    She was left black and blue
    When she tripped and fell on her ass.

    But this wasn't the end of Cass
    'cause she was a plucky little lass
    Being TG is making me wobbly
    So now I'll try a new hobby:
    Making fake nails from stained glass.

    Best,
    Melody
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    August 1, 2010 10:56 PM BST
    Great thread, Melody. Haiku or not Haiku? That is the question...

    Winter's passing now,
    And Spring beckons a new life,
    Death: a transition.

    Much love
    Rae x
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    August 2, 2010 12:10 AM BST
    What is this haiku
    If only I understood
    Antarctic winter
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    August 2, 2010 1:25 AM BST
    Summer hills turn tan,
    Dogs want to walk in the shade,
    Smart dogs, dumb human..

    Thanks Rae and Penny for sharing. Much love!

    Best,
    Melody
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    August 2, 2010 2:13 AM BST
    Testing everyone's patience...

    Have no way to tell,
    Am I a boy or a girl,
    August, how to know?

    Best,
    Melody
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    August 2, 2010 2:56 AM BST
    Fear of the unknown,
    On a hot summer evening,
    Coming out to friends.

    Hugs,
    Marsha
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    August 2, 2010 11:38 AM BST
    Trapped in fear of hate
    Frozen Icicles thawing
    Warmth of dignity

    To live and grow true
    Human being realised
    Sunshine hugs with love
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    August 5, 2010 6:43 PM BST
    August decision,
    Will gays be able to wed?
    Supremes to decide...

    Best,
    Melody
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    August 5, 2010 9:25 PM BST
    Melody wrote:

    "August decision,
    Will gays be able to wed?
    Supremes to decide... "


    Surely such a right
    Should not hinge upon the whim
    Of Diana Ross?

    Hugs,

    Judith

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    August 5, 2010 9:41 PM BST
    Hi Judith,

    I knew someone would call me on that one when I wrote it, but the 5 syllable limit is a really hard, LOL I'll try to do better next time.

    But then, I think maybe Ballard, Wilson and Ross would be a more competent court than Roberts, Scalia, Thomas and Alito.

    Best,
    Melody
  • August 5, 2010 10:54 PM BST
    There once was a young girl named Melody
    Who used to rhyme "hobby" with "wobbly"
    And when she said "Haiku"
    Her friend said "bless you",
    "Do think it will rain?"
    She said "pwobabway".
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    August 5, 2010 11:02 PM BST
    Hi Janis,

    Damn, you've found me out.... at least I put a (?) in the title of this thread. to cover my backside.

    Best,
    Melody
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    August 6, 2010 3:54 PM BST
    Hi Judith.

    Thanks for the add. No problem about the haiku comment - I'm no poet and I know it.
    Mostly just keeping the Forum active so folks with more talent will use it when the muse comes to them.

    Best, Melody

    Oh yeah, wasn't Neil Young with them for a while? (that's gonna confuse some people - PM refused to let me reply directly to you.)
  • August 7, 2010 3:13 AM BST
    Who me? just a girl.
    Love to dance on the rain days
    The flowers come later.
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    August 7, 2010 9:27 PM BST
    Hi Marsha and Ursula,

    Thank you both for contributing to this thread. Fun to she how other's minds work when in creative mode.

    If more folks want to contribute, I won't feel obliged to attempt any more poetry, lol.

    Best,
    Melody

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    August 7, 2010 11:18 PM BST


    Out of the ashes
    Of a wintry childhood past
    A phoenix rises.



    Thanks for keeping my
    Little writers home alive
    And well, Melody.

    :)

    Nowt wrong with your poetry, Melody, keep it up...

    Much love
    Rae xx
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    January 10, 2012 12:53 PM GMT

    Impatient - thought,

    Improbable - wish,

    Impractical frog,

    Sound of a kiss.

    Spring.


    This post was edited by Al McKeown at January 10, 2012 12:55 PM GMT
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    January 11, 2012 12:30 AM GMT

    Smooth cream soft skin

    Sweet dreams once in

    We go out

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    January 11, 2012 1:17 AM GMT

    Mermaids purse,

    Tulips open,

    Cock crows,

    Harvest ripens,

    Silent


    This post was edited by Al McKeown at January 11, 2012 1:20 AM GMT
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    January 13, 2012 12:39 PM GMT
    Deliciously thought evoking Al McKeown.I love it
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    June 16, 2015 7:58 PM BST
    My collection of music
    It runs the gamut from Bach to Beach Boys
    Tunes you can hum and toons that bring back memories,
    I haven’t added to the collection, nothing new…
    I wonder whether I’m missing something, new and exciting.
    Jazz touches me deep in my soul but leaves me empty
    Wanting more.
     
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    September 2, 2015 6:57 PM BST
    Feelings
    Physical feelings, mostly pain 
    Emotional feelings hidden, mostly pain
    Physical pain healed, mostly
    Emotional pain forgotten, sometimes remembered
    Remember the joy and not the pain 
     
    Gracie xxooox
     
     
     
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    September 2, 2015 10:03 PM BST

    Hi Mary Gracie,

     

    Well done, a slightly unconventional but still very relevant 'haiku' - sometimes express ourselves means exceeding the normal bounds of rules like literary constraints.  

     

    Sun days off,

    Time runs on,

    To many thought fly south,

    At night stars chase,

    All our dreams .

     

     

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    September 2, 2015 11:40 PM BST
    Thank you for reading my miserable effort at haiku.   Many moons ago if wrote one following the prescribed formula. 
    Thank you for the compliment. I promise to work on it.
    hugs
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    September 3, 2015 2:49 AM BST

    It is tempting to follow a prescribed set of rules, to force that square peg into the nearest round hole, conform to societies expections, but wouldn't it be easier as well as preferable to be happy with what you created yourself?    

     

    Love is like a butterfly,

    A butterfly of summer,

    It lives, a life, a day,

    So dare to fly butterfly,

    Far too short the sweet do cry,

    To live, a summer butterfly,

    So love to live each day

     

  • May 12, 2016 2:40 AM BST

    Yet, though a rose by any other name is still a rose,

    a poem not a haiku could be a sonnet.

     

    Evening breeze whips my skirt,

    Perfume the fragrance of roses,

    Outdoors again-do they know?.